TechnologyIsChangingOurLives技术

　　TechnologyIsChangingOurLives技术正改变我们的生活
　　TechnologyIsChangingOurLives
　　Thefactthattechnologyischangingourlivesisundeniable。
　　Firstofall，technologymakeslifeeasier。Withtheinventionofvariouselectrichomeappliances，houseworkisnolongeradrudgery。Withtheinnovationofassemblylinesworkersdonothavetostrugglewithsplittinglumpofwoodoriron。Withtheemergingmedicaltreatmentortherapy，thehandicappedcanleadabetterlife。Withnewvehiclescomingintobeing，say，subway，maglev，spaceship，countriesandcontinentsarebridgedandatriptothemoonisnolongeradream。Unquestionably，technologyincreasinglyfacilitatesourlives。
　　Moreover，technologyoffersusmorefun。Ontheonehand，withgenerationsofnewtechnology，peoplehavemoreleisuretimetoenjoytheirlivesbecausetheintroductionofnewtechnologyspeedsupproductivity，whichinturnleadstoreductionofworkinghours。Asaresulttimetorelaxafterworkisnomorealuxury。Ontheotherhand，meansofentertainmentbecomesperse。YoucantravelaroundtheworldasyouwishwiththenewmeansoftrafficspringinguporyoucanenjoyyourselfsittingcomfortablyinfrontofyourTVset，whichopenstoyouanewvistaoftheoutsideworld。Itsawonderfullife，isntit？
　　Itistruethatnewtechnologyrendersourlifeeasierandmorepleasant，butasissooftenpointedout，technologyisatwoedgedswordwhichcanbeusedequallyforgoodoreviltheothersideweareoftenblindto。Whilepolymercanbeturnedintothrowawayplasticandflashybags，italsothreatensourenvironmentwithsccallwhitetrash。WhileInternetfacilitatesourcommunication，itgivesrisetoincreasingnetcrimes。Beingaddietedtocomputersstiflestheverycreativityofhumannature。
　　Inconclusion，whileweenjoythefreedomandconveniencebroughtbyhightech，wemustbealerttoitssideeffect。Theonlythingweneedtorememberisthatweshouldcontroltechnologyinsteadofallowingourselvesbeingcontrolled。
　　简评
　　本篇的主题是科技改变生活，其影响有正面的，亦有负面的。文章脉络清晰，可分为三个部分：科技给生活以便利；科技给生活带来乐趣；滥用科技会给生活带来威胁和损害。作者以忠告结束全文：科技不可避免地改变生活，关键是人们要支配科技而不是被科技所支配。
　　本篇文章的可取之处主要有两点。首先，文章的脉络清晰。保证一篇文章成功的前提是具备全面、简明的中心思想以及与主题息息相关并互相关联的主题句。主题句可以直接陈述或以含蓄的方式体现在每个段落的开首或末尾。另外，总结性的结尾是一篇文章完整的体现。其次，本文运用了大量的平衡句。平行结构有两种句型：一种是对照句即用相同的结构表述两种截然不同的思想；另一种是平衡句即用相同的结构表达两种相同或相似的思想。本文第二段就包含一组平衡句，如Withtheinventionofvariouselectrichomeappliances，houseworkisnolongeradrudgcryWiththeinnovationOfassemblylineworkersdonothavetostrugglewithsplittinglumpOfwoodOrironWiththeemergmgmedicaltreatmentOrtherapy，thehandicappedcanleadabetterlifeWithnewvehiclescomingintobeing，say，subway，maglev，spaceship，countriesandcontinentsarebridgedandatriptothemoonisnolongeradream，该组平衡句在内容上相辅相成，语气贯通，较好地表达了科技给生活带来便捷这一主题句。另外，在第三段的结尾，作者运用了附加疑问句，如Itsawonderfullife，isntit，以期获得读者的呼应和共鸣。
　　（点评教师：赵蓉）
　　TechnologyIsChangingOurLives技术正改变我们的生活